what a lovely picture this is a very interesting story i like how it ended i wish it could be longer.
Your story was pretty good. I loved how you all made a rodeo girl relate to the Ferguson, Missouri situation. Very good thinking. One thing is to check over grammar. And give each quotation a new line. ( A line to itself.)
I couldn't help but find the beginning humorous. I would also like to know why she was laughing.
I liked the way you made it out at a rodeo instead of in Missouri.
It was short could have been longer but I kind of liked the ending.
what a lovely picture this is a very interesting story i like how it ended i wish it could be longer.
ReplyDeleteYour story was pretty good. I loved how you all made a rodeo girl relate to the Ferguson, Missouri situation. Very good thinking. One thing is to check over grammar. And give each quotation a new line. ( A line to itself.)
ReplyDeleteI couldn't help but find the beginning humorous. I would also like to know why she was laughing.
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you made it out at a rodeo instead of in Missouri.
ReplyDeleteIt was short could have been longer but I kind of liked the ending.
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