Great story but you should work on your grammar. Such as capitalization and punctuation. Also it would of been better if you all would've got to finish. But how does this relate to the Michael Brown situation?
It doesn't really relate the Michael Brown story, but a good one. Ya'll need to work on the spelling and grammar as well. It's a really good story though.
Good start if you would have finished it would have been a lot better
ReplyDeleteI like this story. It goes to show you that you don't have to respond with anger and you can forgive.
ReplyDeleteAs I told you before it was good so far, you just should work on some of the sentences that needed commas.
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ReplyDeleteGreat story but you should work on your grammar. Such as capitalization and punctuation. Also it would of been better if you all would've got to finish. But how does this relate to the Michael Brown situation?
ReplyDeleteAlso quotations get a line to itself.
ReplyDeleteIt doesn't really relate the Michael Brown story, but a good one. Ya'll need to work on the spelling and grammar as well. It's a really good story though.
ReplyDeleteit was ok need to be longer and quotations needs a line to itself
ReplyDeleteI don't get it after his death
ReplyDeleteyou kind of got off track but it's good.
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